Note: I'm always reluctant to revise things once I've posted them. But I'm not perfect so I do occasionally miss things. And they need to be fixed eventually. This is the Revisions Page for this story China Blonde
Things that need to be changed
To Do
In Part I - Why is Lara in this tomb?
Proposed Fix: Hillary asked her to check it out while she was already in the neighbourhood since the valley is flooding. And she'll never have another chance.
In Part II - It isn't clear that Buffy is the first person to go into the anteroom.
Planned fix: Not sure yet
Where did the demon that Buffy fights in Part II come from? Why didn't they see it before it attacked her?
Planned Fix:No idea yet.
Lara doesn't have much to do in Part III even though the story is about her. - is she really there?
Proposed fix: Have her join Buffy & Co. when they go into the temple to get info on their task. One of those "prove you are worthy" test/fight scenes maybe?
The fight in part IV is almost non-existent.
Proposed fix: Flesh out the fight scene.
